Thursday, April 05, 2007

This is a quote from an AP article today about an FBI agent killed during a shootout. While this situation is tragic enough, the FBI does everyone a disservice with their quote. This quote, from the FBI, is a textbook example of the language of government.

"Preliminarily, information suggests the agent may have been fatally wounded as a result of the accidental discharge of another agent's weapon during a dynamic arrest situation," the FBI said in a statement Thursday night.

If this sentence appeared in a College Composition class, it would surely raise a flag. My composition teacher, Dr. Smith, would have whipped out trustly old red, crossed out the entire sentence and rewritten it like this:

"We shot our own agent."

I would like to see what a dynamic arrest situation looks like. Does the FBI have video of such an arrest.

The sad thing is the FBI is trying to hide behind this language instead of just coming right out and admitting that one agent accidentally shot another agent. It looks like we need to send the FBI back to English Composition 101.

1 comment:

Anonymous said...

I loved Dr. Smith!